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IMDB the description of the Butler (2013) is a grammatically incorrect sentence. Please fix it if using As as an adjective.
IMDB the description of the Butler (2013) is a grammatically incorrect sentence. Please fix it if using As as an adjective.
Posted 7 years ago
Emperor, Champion
Peter, Champion
Peter, Champion
I think it does, though perhaps it's a little hard to decipher:
(1) As Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House, (2) the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events affect this man's life, family, and American society.
(1) As Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House, (2) the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events affect this man's life, family, and American society.
This is grammatically correct but lacks flow.
Emperor, Champion
The sentence structure is not that great. I also don't like the two "as" in one sentence.
Perhaps:
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While Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House, major events, like the civil rights movement and Vietnam, affect the man's family and American society.
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Perhaps:
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While Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House, major events, like the civil rights movement and Vietnam, affect the man's family and American society.
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You don't need a comma before like. You could say: such as
Dan Dassow, Champion
To emphasize what Peter says:
The sentence is grammatical, although it may be difficult to read.
"As Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House," functions as the independent clause. It is of the form:
adverb (as) subject (Cecil Gaines) verb (serves) predicate (eight presidents) prepositional phrase (during his tenure as a butler at the White House)
"the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events affect this man's life, family, and American society." functions as the dependent clause. It is the form:
complex subject (the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events) verb (affect) complex predicate (this man's life, family, and American society).
The sentence is grammatical, although it may be difficult to read.
"As Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House," functions as the independent clause. It is of the form:
adverb (as) subject (Cecil Gaines) verb (serves) predicate (eight presidents) prepositional phrase (during his tenure as a butler at the White House)
"the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events affect this man's life, family, and American society." functions as the dependent clause. It is the form:
complex subject (the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events) verb (affect) complex predicate (this man's life, family, and American society).
bluesmanSF, Champion
