imDb please use correct grammar

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your description of the Butler

IMDB the description of the Butler (2013) is a grammatically incorrect sentence. Please fix it if using As as an adjective.
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Posted 7 years ago

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You'd be better off fixing this yourself.
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I don't see any problems with the plot descriptions for The Butler.
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The first sentence if you start with as it needs to be followed with a second point.
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I think it does, though perhaps it's a little hard to decipher:

(1) As Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House, (2) the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events affect this man's life, family, and American society.
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This is grammatically correct but lacks flow.
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The sentence structure is not that great. I also don't like the two "as" in one sentence.

Perhaps:

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While Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House, major events, like the civil rights movement and Vietnam, affect the man's family and American society.
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You don't need a comma before like. You could say: such as
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To emphasize what Peter says:

The sentence is grammatical, although it may be difficult to read.

"As Cecil Gaines serves eight presidents during his tenure as a butler at the White House," functions as the independent clause. It is of the form:
adverb (as) subject (Cecil Gaines) verb (serves) predicate (eight presidents) prepositional phrase (during his tenure as a butler at the White House)

"the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events affect this man's life, family, and American society." functions as the dependent clause. It is the form:
complex subject (the civil rights movement, Vietnam, and other major events) verb (affect) complex predicate (this man's life, family, and American society).
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actually the first part of the sentence is the dependent clause. lol
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Kelly

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hahahaha.... this totally cracks me up
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imDb and IMDB should have said IMDb...just sayin'... ;)
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7 people are reading my comment no thousands
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Pamela Kustas

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Not thousands

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