Hi, I have updated plot outline of the movie "Mere Pyare Prime Minister" several times ... but it still shows the old plot outline. please help.
The Contribution History - 190223-082740-301000
The Contribution History - 190223-082740-301000
Posted 1 year ago
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Its declined.
Reason- Does not meet contribution guidelines.
Thank You for the feedback.
Its declined.
Reason- Does not meet contribution guidelines.
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Is this the movie https://www.imdb.com/title/tt8207768/reference?
Is this the movie https://www.imdb.com/title/tt8207768/reference?
Yes Sir,
PLOT OUTLINE EDIT
Before- It will focus on the issue of open defecation and sanitation problems in the country. It highlights the relationship between a mother and son, and stars National Award-winning actress Anjali Patil in the role of the mother.
After- The story revolves around four children living in a Mumbai slum, 8 year old Kanhu living in a slum of Mumbai, writes a letter to the Prime Minister after an ugly incident happens with his mother. It highlights the relationship between a mother and son, and stars National Award-winning actress Anjali Patil in the role of the mother.
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PLOT OUTLINE EDIT
Before- It will focus on the issue of open defecation and sanitation problems in the country. It highlights the relationship between a mother and son, and stars National Award-winning actress Anjali Patil in the role of the mother.
After- The story revolves around four children living in a Mumbai slum, 8 year old Kanhu living in a slum of Mumbai, writes a letter to the Prime Minister after an ugly incident happens with his mother. It highlights the relationship between a mother and son, and stars National Award-winning actress Anjali Patil in the role of the mother.
Reason- Does not meet contribution guidelines.
Please check and give me feedback..
Thank You
Adrian, Champion
Almost anything that starts with "The story" is going to get rejected. It's not a properly formed outline.
Interesting.
In my opinion the existing one needs updating (nothing personal to the person who wrote it). All the examples in this thread seems to be taken from Wikipedia.
There are also some repetitiveness in outline above, like mentioning ”living in a Mumbai slum” first and then ”living in a slum of Mumbai”. That alone is a lot of characters wasted (so to speak). And things like ”stars National Award-winning actress” doesn’t relly fit in the outline section.
I would probably word it something like (note: without really knowing anything about the film, though)...
”A story about four children living in a Mumbai slum in India. An eight-year old Kanhu writes a letter to the Prime Minister after a dramatic incident with his mother. A small boy has to achieve the impossible.”
There are also some repetitiveness in outline above, like mentioning ”living in a Mumbai slum” first and then ”living in a slum of Mumbai”. That alone is a lot of characters wasted (so to speak). And things like ”stars National Award-winning actress” doesn’t relly fit in the outline section.
I would probably word it something like (note: without really knowing anything about the film, though)...
”A story about four children living in a Mumbai slum in India. An eight-year old Kanhu writes a letter to the Prime Minister after a dramatic incident with his mother. A small boy has to achieve the impossible.”
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